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I am the angel,
With the looks of heaven sent
Porcelain skin,
And eyes of emerald green,
Such a vast disguise –
Something that you would never guess

Behind all the beauty,
I’m not what I seem-
I’m not sent from above,
But sent from underneath
From the palace of flames,
I have a heart from Hell

My eyes will rage with fire
As you look deep inside
I’m here to haunt you,
A vow to the undead
I'll corrupt your dreams-
Just as you had mine,

I could make you wish your death,
As you did to me
But my wish came true-
And I won’t let you be so lucky
I’ll let you suffer with the guilt
Of the death you created upon me

Behind all the beauty,
I’m not what I seem-
Cracks resting on my wrist,
The scars print your name-
I’m the angel of the sinners
There’s no beauty left inside me
©2008-2010 ~dancexaway
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dark.

comment, critique.

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:iconjagger-moon:
Dark but beautiful.
Stick with the repeating a point,it was nice to see how it all came together.
Nice idea.Nice poem.Could have been more discriptive though.

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"For every man that wants to rule the world, there will be a man that just wants to be free" - Nerina Pallot

I'm not Crazy! Just insanely delightful!!

"If love is a drug I guess we're all sober. If hope is a song I guess its all over." - Nerina Pallot
:icondancexaway:
thanks so much! i actaully felt like i wasnt being very discriptive also, which kind of disappointed me, but i might edit it =]

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No smile is more beautiful as one that Has struggled through tears
:iconmoonlightfading:
I really like the first two stanzas, the imagery is really good, but in a dark way, lol.

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:sun:

katelouise.
It's me and the moon, she said.
:icondancexaway:
thanks dear! =]

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No smile is more beautiful as one that Has struggled through tears
:icondragon260:
Nice, I like it. But it could use some more.
:iconmoonlightfading:
:] Not a problem.

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:sun:

katelouise.
It's me and the moon, she said.
:icondancexaway:
thankss =]
yeah, it needs to be edited

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No smile is more beautiful as one that Has struggled through tears
:iconjagger-moon:
your welcome.Don't take me wrong,i really enjoyed reading it and would love to read it if you do edit it.

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"For every man that wants to rule the world, there will be a man that just wants to be free" - Nerina Pallot

I'm not Crazy! Just insanely delightful!!

"If love is a drug I guess we're all sober. If hope is a song I guess its all over." - Nerina Pallot
:icondancexaway:
thanks for the critiques and comments =]

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No smile is more beautiful as one that Has struggled through tears

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